Stepfather

[Eromenos (imported)]

This story corresponds to my basic fantasy, that is, a man unmanning another man. S&M does not appeal or women castrating men or Blacks castrating whites. The story created an interesting world, but the theme was not developed. When Jase sent to school, did he get counseling as a new eunuch? Were there teacher eunuchs?Was there a separate subsociety of eunuchs, and if so what forms did it take, what rituals? How did his reconciliation with Roger work? What was it like when Jase went to breakfast table in the week after he lost his balls? What thoughts did he have as he came to terms with his new status? Did Roger come to admire him as a eunuch? Did a sexual relationship develop between them? In a world where nearly half of born males were eunuchs, what was the sexual relationship between eunuchs and intact men? Did intact men have eunuch concubines as well as girl friends? Did Roger arrange for Jase's first anal fuck, as he arranged to take his balls? Would it not have made more sense if he kept Jase's balls, since he was responsible for removing them?

[JesusA (imported)]

This review seems to be a request that “Sander” write a novel describing Jase and the alternate universe in which he lives, rather than the short story that he produced. The review, however, was enough to get me to read one of my first Archive stories in some time. The story The Stepfather (http://www.eunuch.org/Alpha/S/ea_203239the_step.htm) is very well written.

I agree with Eromenos that “Sander” has extended the “San Carlos Island” alternative universe in interesting directions. Most of Eromenos’ questions are good ones that might be developed in future stories set in that universe. I can think of several additional questions, as well. Mine, though, would relate to heterosexual relations in a world with so many eunuchs. I hope that “Sander” will continue to write and explore the possibilities….

[SanderNullo (imported)]

This review seems to be a request that “Sander” write a novel describing Jase and the alternate universe in which he lives, rather than the short story that he produced. The review, however, was enough to get me to read one of my first Archive stories in some time. The story The Stepfather (http://www.eunuch.org/Alpha/S/ea_203239the_step.htm) is very well written.

I agree with Eromenos that “Sander” has extended the “San Carlos Island” alternative universe in interesting directions. Most of Eromenos’ questions are good ones that might be developed in future stories set in that universe. I can think of several additional questions, as well. Mine, though, would relate to heterosexual relations in a world with so many eunuchs. I hope that “Sander” will continue to write and explore the possibilities….

Although I find those interesting issues to explore, it would be better to explore them in a new story, rather than trying to expand this one, which was designed to be a quick 'one off' story. The stories Eromenos and Jesus request would take much more effort than this one did, and since authors writing for this site receive little feedback, one has little incentive to write even short stories. Also, most of the readers of stories on this site seem to be looking for short stories, a quick turn on. The longer stories lose readers with each new chapter.

I do thank both Eromenos and Jesus for their kind comments, and I would suggest to the lurkers, those that read, but that never bother to comment, if you want more stories to read, let the authors know you like the ones you do like. With this board available to unregistered users, all it takes is a few minutes of your time. There's many more stories I could write, but why bother?

[Eromenos (imported)]

I am sorry that there is no more feedback, but I hope you will be patient. It is not that easy. I tried to make a comment three times before I figured out how to do it. The feedback link on the story does not work, nor does your address link.

I think you are right about the multiple chapter things. I am unlikely to read anything entitled Chapt 34 of something. But it is different when you create a credible alternative universe and characters that can develop through it. That leads you on. You are one of the few writers on this site that hasve done that. Justoneguy is another. With his stories too, I keep hoping for a sequel to his "Thinning the Herd Six." It ends with the castration of a character, the implanation of a pussy, and his forcible deflowring. But it does not describe therelationship thatwould inevitable develop beween him and his master and his adjustment to his new sex life. (Afteer all, he would be a pussy for the rest of his life.)

As regards Stepfather, the conflict is a typical conflict between two tom cats. It is resolved by he removal of Jase's maleness by a more powerful male (supported by the law and society). Roger obviously enjoyed his triumph. That is why he wanted to witness the castration. But it would be logical for him to keep Jase's balls in a jar as a trophy, rather than leave them to a kid who might lose them. He could return them when Jase came of age and formed a sexual relationship with an intact male. Furthermore, Roger might have a eunuch companion who could help Jase accept his new life and adjust to it. Also, since Roger took away Jase"s maleness, it would be logical for him to give him away sexually to a chosen intact male and enjoy his deflowring. I like the submission of one male to another (or exmale) but it is best when it is accompanied by affection.

Although I find those interesting issues to explore, it would be better to explore them in a new story, rather than trying to expand this one, which was designed to be a quick 'one off' story. The stories Eromenos and Jesus request would take much more effort than this one did, and since authors writing for this site receive little feedback, one has little incentive to write even short stories. Also, most of the readers of stories on this site seem to be looking for short stories, a quick turn on. The longer stories lose readers with each new chapter.

I do thank both Eromenos and Jesus for their kind comments, and I would suggest to the lurkers, those that read, but that never bother to comment, if you want more stories to read, let the authors know you like the ones you do like. With this board available to unregistered users, all it takes is a few minutes of your time. There's many more stories I could write, but why bother?

[StefanIsMe (imported)]

GOOD POINTS!

Especially SanderNullo. I have a terrible habit of saying to myself, "I'll give feedback tomorrow, or on the weekend", and before I know it, I've completely forgotten.

Fantastic work, Sander. Definitely appreciated, both the multi-parts and the one off; I particularly liked that. In your San Carlos story, I really appreciated the fact that you spent more time showing us how the feelings and behavior of the boys changed. That's something that is often left out.

I'm definitely looking forward to more of anything from you!

[Eromenos (imported)]

I am sorry that there is no more feedback, but I hope you will be patient. It is not that easy. I tried to make a comment three times before I figured out how to do it. The feedback link on the story does not work, nor does your address link.

I think you are right about the multiple chapter things. I am unlikely to read anything entitled Chapt 34 of something. But it is different when you create a credible alternative universe and characters that can develop through it. That leads you on. You are one of the few writers on this site that hasve done that. Justoneguy is another. With his stories too, I keep hoping for a sequel to his "Thinning the Herd Six." It ends with the castration of a character, the implanation of a pussy, and his forcible deflowring. But it does not describe therelationship thatwould inevitable develop beween him and his master and his adjustment to his new sex life. (Afteer all, he would be a pussy for the rest of his life.)

As regards Stepfather, the conflict is a typical conflict between two tom cats. It is resolved by he removal of Jase's maleness by a more powerful male (supported by the law and society). Roger obviously enjoyed his triumph. That is why he wanted to witness the castration. But it would be logical for him to keep Jase's balls in a jar as a trophy, rather than leave them to a kid who might lose them. He could return them when Jase came of age and formed a sexual relationship with an intact male. Furthermore, Roger might have a eunuch companion who could help Jase accept his new life and adjust to it. Also, since Roger took away Jase"s maleness, it would be logical for him to give him away sexually to a chosen intact male and enjoy his deflowring. I like the submission of one male to another (or exmale) but it is best when it is accompanied by affection.

Suggestions: Fictional autobiography is a classic form, like Davy Copperfield. A second story could be about Jase's adjustment to being a young eunuch. First scene: Breakfast table the day after. Jase has a look of pain and reproach on his face. His mother is uneasy. Roger is satisfied but gruff. He tells Jase not to upset his mother. For better or worse he is now a eunuch for life, and he has to live to live with it. He tells Jase that he has an adult eunuch lover who will take care of him while his wound is healing and explain to him about what it is like to be a eunuch. He says that he did not think that Jase deserved to be a man but that he does not hate him, and that he can love him as a eunuch. He recognizes that he has a responsibility to see that he has a happy life. He tells Jase that he will be beautiful and lovable as a eunuch.

Roger's adult eunuch friend tells Jase that he will be loved and taken care of one day by an adult intact man. He says eunuchs can show physical affection to each other and can go around naked.

Jase goes to school. His home room teacher announces that he has been castrated and will attend the eunuchs' PE class. The PE teacher is a eunuch. The class concentrates on swimming rather than contact sports. After a year when the hormonal chanes are complete, there is a ceremony when an ear ring is fitted on Jase to show that he is really a eunuch. The eunuchs are isolated from the intact boys to avoid sexual aggression. Roger's eunuch friend talls Jase that his former boy friends, who now avoid him, will become interested in him sexually after they pass through puberty. When Jase is sixeen, Roger gives him a butt plug and tells him to begin stretching his asshole.

[SanderNullo (imported)]

Because of the responses I've received in this thread I'm writing another story that will address many of the wishes of the people posting to it. The story won't be about Jase, although, since it will be the same alternative universe, he might be a bit player in it.

Although it won't be easy, I'll try to work in male domination, gay sex, and straight sex. Many guys are bisexual, so it isn't unrealistic for 'our' boy to be. Landon doesn't have a stepfather, but he does have an older brother, who may adequately fill Roger's shoes.

This is going to be a fairly long story, so it may be some days before it's posted.

Sander

[Eromenos (imported)]

Because of the responses I've received in this thread I'm writing another story that will address many of the wishes of the people posting to it. The story won't be about Jase, although, since it will be the same alternative universe, he might be a bit player in it.

Although it won't be easy, I'll try to work in male domination, gay sex, and straight sex. Many guys are bisexual, so it isn't unrealistic for 'our' boy to be. Landon doesn't have a stepfather, but he does have an older brother, who may adequately fill Roger's shoes.

This is going to be a fairly long story, so it may be some days before it's posted.

Sander

I look forward to reading your story. But I hope that you will return to Jase at some point to follow his transformation through to its conclusion. I suggest the following for the Coming of Age of a Eunuch: Age 14 and 15, years of discovery. The new eunuch discovers his body and those of his peers. Eunuchs play naked since they dont need athletic supporters and have nothing to lose sexually. They notice each others bodies. They are becoming pretty. Exercise prevents fat but they are a little fuller in the hips and ass. They let their hair grow long. They have a soft slender look. Penises are small but sensitive.

At about 15 they get an implant to make their penises and assholes more sensitive and to give them more sexual hunger. They begin to notice that the boys are looking at them in a different way. They start to hear rumors about ass fucking, that men and boys want to fuck them in the ass and make them scream. They are both fearful and excited. Jase makes a eunuch friend, a young Black boy. His father had him castrated because he has two older brothers. He comes to Jase's house and plays sexually with him. The parents accept it.

At 16, Roger tells Jase it is time for him to be fucked. He gives him a butt plug to start preparing himself. Roger tells him he has the right to chose the first lover who will open him up. He choses the father of Jase's friend. When the time comes, he drives Jase to a place for fucking and takes his balls in a jar with him as a symbol of his eunuchhood. They arrive, he tells Jase to strip and then he pulls down his underpants as a sign of giving him away. He introduces him to his fucker, the father of his friend, who has a huge dick. Roger tells Jase it is going to hurt and there is no shame in screaming but he has to be brave and not try to get away for beg for mercy. He fondles Jase. This is the first time he has seen him naked since he was castrated. He tells him that he is beautiful. Jase kneels and sucks his cock. He lies on his stomach. The father of his friend mounts him and fucks him powerfully. Jase squeals but takes it. Roger pats his head and compliments him on his bravery and tells him what a beautiful sight the coupling is. Jase is shattered physically and psychologically but afterwards he feels satisfied and fulfilled. His friend's father fucks him again, this time on his back, so that he can fondle him and kiss him while he fucking him. Then Roger mounts his friend and fucks him. The friends' father pats his son on the head during the fuck and compliments him on his bravery.

After the deflowering, Roger tells Jase he is free now to choose his sex partners. Jase then meets his old friend Shane. They both see each other in a different light, discover each other sexually. They become lovers. Jase lives in a home for young eunuchs where he can invite as many boys as he likes. He sleeps with Shame every night but has orgies on the weekends. Additional details: When Jase and Roger and his friend and the latter's father arrive at the fucking place. It is a room with a jacuzzi and couches and a ledge. The two fathers put the jars with their sons' balls on the ledge. They all disrobe. It is the first time Jace has seen Roger naked. He admires him and his large penis. He is stunned by seeing his friend's father naked. He is huge with a huge dick. He trembles. His friend tells him to be brave. His father will fuck him hrd but he is a nice buy. Jace kneels and sucks Roger and licks his balls, as a sign of reconciliation. Roger pulls down Jase's underpans. The friend's father pulls down the underpants of his son. Roger lubricates jace's ass. His friend's father lucricates his son's ass. Roger leads Jace to the couchs and lays him down on his stomach. The friend's father mounts him and slowly shoves his cock up his assk. Roger watches. Then when the father begins to fuck, he goes to the front of Jase and strokes his head, telling him to be brave. Jase squels but takes it. When the father finishes, Jase is limp. Roger embraces him and compliments him and tells him that he is now an adult eunuch and a good one. Roger then mounts the friend and fucks him, while the friend's father strokes his son's head and compliments him on his beauty and his bravery. After the two young eunuchs are fucked for the first time, they lie on their backs next to each other and take it for the second time. Roger and the friend's father comment that the two young eunuchs are now singing together as they squeal.

[Eromenos (imported)]

I look forward to reading your story. But I hope that you will return to Jase at some point to follow his transformation through to its conclusion. I suggest the following for the Coming of Age of a Eunuch: Age 14 and 15, years of discovery. The new eunuch discovers his body and those of his peers. Eunuchs play naked since they dont need athletic supporters and have nothing to lose sexually. They notice each others bodies. They are becoming pretty. Exercise prevents fat but they are a little fuller in the hips and ass. They let their hair grow long. They have a soft slender look. Penises are small but sensitive.

At about 15 they get an implant to make their penises and assholes more sensitive and to give them more sexual hunger. They begin to notice that the boys are looking at them in a different way. They start to hear rumors about ass fucking, that men and boys want to fuck them in the ass and make them scream. They are both fearful and excited. Jase makes a eunuch friend, a young Black boy. His father had him castrated because he has two older brothers. He comes to Jase's house and plays sexually with him. The parents accept it.

At 16, Roger tells Jase it is time for him to be fucked. He gives him a butt plug to start preparing himself. Roger tells him he has the right to chose the first lover who will open him up. He choses the father of Jase's friend. When the time comes, he drives Jase to a place for fucking and takes his balls in a jar with him as a symbol of his eunuchhood. They arrive, he tells Jase to strip and then he pulls down his underpants as a sign of giving him away. He introduces him to his fucker, the father of his friend, who has a huge dick. Roger tells Jase it is going to hurt and there is no shame in screaming but he has to be brave and not try to get away for beg for mercy. He fondles Jase. This is the first time he has seen him naked since he was castrated. He tells him that he is beautiful. Jase kneels and sucks his cock. He lies on his stomach. The father of his friend mounts him and fucks him powerfully. Jase squeals but takes it. Roger pats his head and compliments him on his bravery and tells him what a beautiful sight the coupling is. Jase is shattered physically and psychologically but afterwards he feels satisfied and fulfilled. His friend's father fucks him again, this time on his back, so that he can fondle him and kiss him while he fucking him. Then Roger mounts his friend and fucks him. The friends' father pats his son on the head during the fuck and compliments him on his bravery.

After the deflowering, Roger tells Jase he is free now to choose his sex partners. Jase then meets his old friend Shane. They both see each other in a different light, discover each other sexually. They become lovers. Jase lives in a home for young eunuchs where he can invite as many boys as he likes. He sleeps with Shame every night but has orgies on the weekends. Additional details: When Jase and Roger and his friend and the latter's father arrive at the fucking place. It is a room with a jacuzzi and couches and a ledge. The two fathers put the jars with their sons' balls on the ledge. They all disrobe. It is the first time Jace has seen Roger naked. He admires him and his large penis. He is stunned by seeing his friend's father naked. He is huge with a huge dick. He trembles. His friend tells him to be brave. His father will fuck him hrd but he is a nice buy. Jace kneels and sucks Roger and licks his balls, as a sign of reconciliation. Roger pulls down Jase's underpans. The friend's father pulls down the underpants of his son. Roger lubricates jace's ass. His friend's father lucricates his son's ass. Roger leads Jace to the couchs and lays him down on his stomach. The friend's father mounts him and slowly shoves his cock up his assk. Roger watches. Then when the father begins to fuck, he goes to the front of Jase and strokes his head, telling him to be brave. Jase squels but takes it. When the father finishes, Jase is limp. Roger embraces him and compliments him and tells him that he is now an adult eunuch and a good one. Roger then mounts the friend and fucks him, while the friend's father strokes his son's head and compliments him on his beauty and his bravery. After the two young eunuchs are fucked for the first time, they lie on their backs next to each other and take it for the second time. Roger and the friend's father comment that the two young eunuchs are now singing together as they squeal.

Another theme that could be developed is that of Jase's

eunuch friend, a young Black boy,

and the friend's father, who gets Jase's cherry. The father should be big, with a huge cock, ironic, friendly, phlegmatic. He knows that he is going to hurt the young eunuch, he does not want to hurt him, but he enjoys his power and he expects the young eunuch to be able to take it.

[Eromenos (imported)]

Another theme that could be developed is that of Jase's

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r and he expects the young eunuch to be able to take it.

The German translation of this story that has jut appared is really an adaptation. It adds the theme of ass fucking of eunuchs, which is not in the original story. It adds the idea that Jase's castration would make it possible for his intact friend Shawn to fuck him, which the story indicates that both want. It also adds the idea that Roger really wants to fuck Jase. The adaptation creats some contradictions. The original story says that Jase has no eunuch friends. In the German story, both Jase and Shawn have eunuch friends. In fact, Shawn has fucked one of them. In the original story and the German adaption, Jase's mother threatens to have his penis cut off if he does not calm down. In the adaption, Jase has the right to decise how much of his genitals he wants cut off. Supposedly this is the result of a new law designed to protect children from abuse by their parents (although I cant see how it would).

The adaptation is one way of developing the theme, but it does it in a sadistic one involving the sexual abuse of a minor by an adult. That turns me off (and may be dangerous from a legal standpoint). I think it would make a much more interesting and exciting story if the theme of reconciliation between Roger and Jase were developed, with Roger giving away Jase sexually after his 16th birthday and helping him enjoy his fucking by another man.