Ayzintion City – The Fuckfest

[blondboy (imported)]

I thought that this was an excellent story. I really enjoyed the description and how you were able to really get into the head of the slave-owner. I also really thought that the amount of description was just right. Often, stories are lacking in description. Other times. there is so much description that it takes away from the story. In "The Fuckfest" you had enough description that you could get a good picture of the people, the setting, the action, and the culture of the town, yet the story never felt slowed by the description and continually moved along. It was a good balence.

The only thing that I would have liked added was to have gone into why Jake was being nutted too. Nathaniel had been making advances on his daughter yet Jake, who was older, hadn't. I just was a bit confused as to why he decided to nut both of them.

Anyway, I really liked the story and thought that it was well-written. While I have never read an Ayzintion City story before I know that this one will not be the last. If they are even half as good quality as this one I'm sure that I will enjoy reading them. Thanks for the story!

[gandalf (imported)]

From my reading of the story, I got the impression that Jake was getting the big head (no pun intended) and that he thought he was better than anyone else. Reread the story, you might catch that from one of impressions his owner had while watching Jake perform. I enjoyed the story also.

[blondboy (imported)]

Oh!! That makes sense! thanks for clarifying! I really appreciate it.

[tjstill (imported)]

Another truimph in this fantastic series! Great scene setting and character building for a short story. I like the story type and scenarios developed, I enjoy this type of fantasy and wish I could write as well so as to share my ideas and stories. I can do a quick synopsis of my ideas, maybe I should put some in the ideas board.

[vesal_mas (imported)]

Splendid !

Thank you !

[John Sheraton (imported)]

Ditto. Its always good the have Nathan back, especially with Ayzintion stories where he feels at home, likke a native while describing and noting the agony and humility of the slave trade business which was never designed to be fair. Fabulous reading.