A N.I.C.E. Boy By: Ganymede
Posted: Wed Jan 16, 2008 8:21 pm
I just read this story and it is quite good but there are two major problems with it.
The first fifteen of the twenty two parts are very badly formatted. All the lines are double spaced with many sentences broken up.
The story also starts much too soon and contains too much back story. I think most readers would enjoy the story more if they started with part seven instead of with part one.
The first fifteen of the twenty two parts are very badly formatted. All the lines are double spaced with many sentences broken up.
The story also starts much too soon and contains too much back story. I think most readers would enjoy the story more if they started with part seven instead of with part one.