http://www.eunuch.org/Alpha/D/new1doublecross.htm

This is exactly the sort of story that I love. It's got a plot, not a lot, but just enough to make it interesting. It's got naked women and almost sex. It's got a huge penis and a guy who is forced to give it up.

It's not written with very much care, but it has tons of enthusiasm and it ends up being very effective.

Perhaps I will do a remake of this story to smooth off the rough edges and extend it a way to see what happens. The children are a bit young for my taste, so I would definitely make them older and I'd flesh out the dialogue.

Aside from that, this story gets so much exactly right. I think it will be a joy to play with.

It certainly took me long enough, but once I got started the words came like greased lightning. I have finished writing my version of "Double Cross" and I think it is much improved, while still keeping all of the things that I loved about the original.

I have included a small scene after he's lost his balls, just for fun. I always like to do those scenes, but it's the hardest part to write.

I've included more detail about the dialogue of the characters and I have put in the effort to include quotation marks around every direct quote. There are all sorts of little problems like that in the original, so I think this new version really desperately needed to be written, especially considering how much fun the original story was despite all its technical problems.

I have kept in all my favorite quotes, mostly unaltered.

I've sent an email to Plix about submitting it under the new system. I don't want to include my email address with the story, but I'd like Plix to inform me if it gets rejected. Hopefully, anyone who has any comments will post them in this thread or in a private message, rather than send an email to a spam filled account.

I am really eager to find out what people think of the ways that I've changed this story. I definitely think we need more nonconsensual stories in the archive. Look for it to appear in the archive soon, probably called something like "Double Cross (remake)" or something like that.

If you are the original author of the story, please PM or post here so that I can send you my new version! I'd love for it to be an authorized remake.

Actually, I think getting in contact with the original author is more vital than I thought. According to this post: Story Posting Guidelines, there is a rule about using another author's characters without permission.

Surely my remake does not count as plagiarism, since I make the origin of the ideas perfectly clear. These are not my own ideas, they are derived from a source which I cite, and anyone on this forum can read. (In fact, please do read the original "Double Cross". It's a great story.)

Unfortunately, the guidelines do not use the common definition of 'plagiarism'. Instead, it says that it is plagiarism unless I have actual permission from the original author. (If that were the definition used everywhere, historians would be forbidden from citing original sources.) (Because original sources for history tend to be dead and incapable of giving permission. I am concerned that the original author here may be similarly long gone.)

I would really appreciate getting in touch with the original author. Otherwise, can I get permission to post this story based on the fact that the original was so full of grammar errors?

both the original, and the remake, are amazing creations.

The setup is nto just thrown into the end - there's hints about what is going to happen all through, which the protagonist blindly ignores. Such a shame with hung fellows forget to look after their goodies.

That's a lot of w

ChemistryKid (imported) wrote: Fri Apr 13, 2007 5:50 pm hat I loved about the original. I

tried to preserve and enhance that effect in my version.