Siti seems to have become Siki by the end of the story. Please accept my apologies for the error, seemingly made by confusing the name with Miki, a character in 'Todd'.

I hope that it did not spoil the tale for anyone. The youth's name should indeed be Siti!

PUEROS

But have promised Pueros that I would correct the spelling, It's just shy of 1am and I just walked through the door.

My apologies to Pueros and everyone ... I had fully intended to get it corrected before now. Pueros actually emailed me to try to get it done BEFORE posting but I was away from home so promoted the story before I got his note.

Please be patient -- I am checking messages now and will probably have to get to bed but I promise it will be fixed when I get up in the morning.

Bryan

I just went ahead and made the changes tonight. As Pueros said, I hope my delay didn't hinder anyone's enjoyment of this great story.

Thanks Pueros ... for everything!

Thanks Bboy for all your hard work, not only in correcting my mistake but for everything you do for this site!

The last thing you need is a writer to make a silly boob or, should I say, given associated story, boobs!?

PUEROS

I figured out that Siki was Siti. No problem. I still enjoyed the story.

Farrell

not a very good story

I rather enjoyed it. Perhaps an asp might have added to the story? So, was it the plot, the grammar, the characters, or what, that made it "not a very good story" for you? Perhaps a bit more CONSTRUCTIVE criticism would be useful to the Author. I am sure that he would appreciate that, sort of like quality feedback; I know I would, were I producing a defective product for the masses. Please, do expand your thoughts there.:tongueout

Thanks Paulo for your defence.

I did ask for critical feedback about my first attempt at a straight story on this board but a 5-word response wasn't ideal.

If the person concerned really wants me to improve future tales, a little more of his literary wisdom and advice would have been appreciated.

I actually had plans for a (short) 'Cleopatra II' but will probably just return to concentrate on reaching chapter 500 of 'Lycian Prince'!

PUEROS