Attn: "Metropolitan Studies" Author

[Paolo]

Since you didn't include your email, I hope you see this.

Your story starts off OK, but it needs to have at least a HINT of a castration in a story that is titled as a "Part 1". Right now, it is off-topic for archiving here.

Please send or submit a small addition to hint at it before going deeper into Part 2 so I can add it in.

Thanks.

P