I posted the first installment of my first erotic story, ever, a few minutes ago. It's called, "I Am Going Nuts!"
It's just the setup. Jim gets castrated in the next chapter.
The third chapter is about how his life/marriage changes after he becomes a eunuch.
I welcome any and all comments, and constructive criticism of my story.
Given what I have seen on various erotic story sites, I have good ideas. I think. It's my technique I worry about.
I think I have a tendency to "over-tell" a story.
Let me know what you think.
SSG Linus
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YOU have a tendency to overtell? LOL
You're off to a good start. Just try and hold it down to 20 chapters or less.
J/K!!!
You're off to a good start. Just try and hold it down to 20 chapters or less.
J/K!!!
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Paolo,
From you, that is high praise, indeed! Thank you very much!
(I assume that the "just kidding" was for the "20 chapters, bit, not that I was off to a good start.)
I promise to keep it to 3 chapters. Cross my genitals, and hope to be nullified! (grin)
From the outline I have in my head, Chapter 2 might not be as long, but it will probably have more parts.
I can't decide how graphic to be about the castration. And, oh yes, Jimbo is going to be nutless by the end of chapter 2!
I want to "keep it real", and am not sure how to do that best. Jim is based on me, and I can't even watch while I take a flu shot, much less anything else.
About 10 years ago, I had sinus surgery for which they normally only give you a local. After my consultation with the anaesthetist, she talked the surgeon into a general, and they knocked me out.
My dilemma is: do I stay true to the character I am trying to build, or do I play to the audience? I can go with either choice and do both, to some extent.
My problem is two-fold.
One, while I have trolled the story archive, and read most of the straight stories, I am not sure that I have a clear enough mental picture to write a castration procedure scene, in any realistic way.
Two, my main character. In general, I have a rather high tolerance for pain ... except for certain areas of my body ... my groin being one of those area that I have little, if any, tolerance for pain. Besides, receiving pain, of any type, any where on my body is not erotic to me. AT ALL.
So, give me your thoughts. I have, already, incorporated many things to this story that I have learned from this message board. I'm not too egotistical to take a few more ideas..
(BTW, you can see some of my research in the "Tech Help for a Fledgeling Writer" thread on the "Eunuch Central" message board.)
SSG Linus
From you, that is high praise, indeed! Thank you very much!
(I assume that the "just kidding" was for the "20 chapters, bit, not that I was off to a good start.)
I promise to keep it to 3 chapters. Cross my genitals, and hope to be nullified! (grin)
From the outline I have in my head, Chapter 2 might not be as long, but it will probably have more parts.
I can't decide how graphic to be about the castration. And, oh yes, Jimbo is going to be nutless by the end of chapter 2!
I want to "keep it real", and am not sure how to do that best. Jim is based on me, and I can't even watch while I take a flu shot, much less anything else.
About 10 years ago, I had sinus surgery for which they normally only give you a local. After my consultation with the anaesthetist, she talked the surgeon into a general, and they knocked me out.
My dilemma is: do I stay true to the character I am trying to build, or do I play to the audience? I can go with either choice and do both, to some extent.
My problem is two-fold.
One, while I have trolled the story archive, and read most of the straight stories, I am not sure that I have a clear enough mental picture to write a castration procedure scene, in any realistic way.
Two, my main character. In general, I have a rather high tolerance for pain ... except for certain areas of my body ... my groin being one of those area that I have little, if any, tolerance for pain. Besides, receiving pain, of any type, any where on my body is not erotic to me. AT ALL.
So, give me your thoughts. I have, already, incorporated many things to this story that I have learned from this message board. I'm not too egotistical to take a few more ideas..
(BTW, you can see some of my research in the "Tech Help for a Fledgeling Writer" thread on the "Eunuch Central" message board.)
SSG Linus