Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Sat Jan 18, 2020 7:07 pm
Does anyone want to comment on anything about my series? I read every comment on each episode but I would love to hear something on the whole series so far.
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Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Sat Jan 18, 2020 7:31 pm
I have enjoyed every one and always look forward to what you will come up with next! It has been a great series.
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Sun Jan 19, 2020 2:52 pm
I have read them also and enjoyed reading them. Do you have any more coming up?
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Sun Jan 19, 2020 11:23 pm
gandalf (imported) wrote: Sun Jan 19, 2020 2:52 pm I have read them also and enjoyed reading them. Do you have any more coming up?
:)I am with gandalf & sparkey . I want more. Ernie of Maine
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Mon Jan 20, 2020 2:04 am
Love the stories. Do you translate them yourself? I'm always surprised how well Japanese translates to English using just online translators, but it's great that you post in English now.
One thing I really enjoy in a story like yours is escalation, and you have used that in this series well. The 2nd boy is a bit younger than the first, and having the little brother come 2nd really works well. Also, going back to 'finish the job' is just the kind of escalation I like.
It's especially good that you tend to show us how the characters deal with their new situation afterwards; this is important, and not everybody writes beyond the act.
One thing I was thinking about after your last chapter is a different type of 'victim'. This story seems totally ripe for a buddy of the main character to be kind of tricked, or gently pushed, into a simple, minimal castration, which turns into a full nullification once he's brought to the expo and the doctors get a chance to convince him with logic beyond his understanding (and maybe the relaxation drugs they must use for the surgery).
What I'm getting at is, your story has lots of room for growth and tricks/subterfuge to increase new characters' participation in the program, and I definitely look forward to how you will do so!
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Thanks for your stories, please keep them coming!
One thing I really enjoy in a story like yours is escalation, and you have used that in this series well. The 2nd boy is a bit younger than the first, and having the little brother come 2nd really works well. Also, going back to 'finish the job' is just the kind of escalation I like.
It's especially good that you tend to show us how the characters deal with their new situation afterwards; this is important, and not everybody writes beyond the act.
One thing I was thinking about after your last chapter is a different type of 'victim'. This story seems totally ripe for a buddy of the main character to be kind of tricked, or gently pushed, into a simple, minimal castration, which turns into a full nullification once he's brought to the expo and the doctors get a chance to convince him with logic beyond his understanding (and maybe the relaxation drugs they must use for the surgery).
What I'm getting at is, your story has lots of room for growth and tricks/subterfuge to increase new characters' participation in the program, and I definitely look forward to how you will do so!
.Thanks for your stories, please keep them coming!
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Tue Jan 21, 2020 8:53 am
sparkey49 (imported) wrote: Sat Jan 18, 2020 7:31 pm I have enjoyed every one and always look forward to what you will come up with next! It has been a great series.
Thank you. What will you suggest next?
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Tue Jan 21, 2020 8:55 am
gandalf (imported) wrote: Sun Jan 19, 2020 2:52 pm I have read them also and enjoyed reading them. Do you have any more coming up?
Sure there will. The legal castration age was set to be 10 in the BHE universe, meaning that Louis is under age. I am thinking of a way to bypass the law for him.
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Tue Jan 21, 2020 8:56 am
The Maintaner (imported) wrote: Sun Jan 19, 2020 11:23 pm :)I am with gandalf & sparkey . I want more. Ernie of Maine
Thanks. I would love to hear what you expect.
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Tue Jan 21, 2020 9:00 am
jamiepan (imported) wrote: Mon Jan 20, 2020 2:04 am Love the stories. Do you translate them yourself? I'm always surprised how well Japanese translates to English using just online translators, but it's great that you post in English now.
One thing I really enjoy in a story like yours is escalation, and you have used that in this series well. The 2nd boy is a bit younger than the first, and having the little brother come 2nd really works well. Also, going back to 'finish the job' is just the kind of escalation I like.
It's especially good that you tend to show us how the characters deal with their new situation afterwards; this is important, and not everybody writes beyond the act.
One thing I was thinking about after your last chapter is a different type of 'victim'. This story seems totally ripe for a buddy of the main character to be kind of tricked, or gently pushed, into a simple, minimal castration, which turns into a full nullification once he's brought to the expo and the doctors get a chance to convince him with logic beyond his understanding (and maybe the relaxation drugs they must use for the surgery).
What I'm getting at is, your story has lots of room for growth and tricks/subterfuge to increase new characters' participation in the program, and I definitely look forward to how you will do so!
Thanks for your stories, please keep them coming!
I really appreciate your detailed reply. When I first wrote Chinese castration stories, I deliberately used names and sentence structures that could be more easily translated into English. That's why readers like you could understand them. Later I stopped writing in Chinese and went back to English as you are reading now.
Re: Boys' Health Expo series
Posted: Tue Jan 21, 2020 8:39 pm
I really enjoyed the read do you think there will be more chapters I hope so.