Review: "My Nuetering" by Sakebigoe
Posted: Tue Oct 15, 2019 7:02 am
I really enjoyed this story, which appears to be the only one by its author, Sakebigoe. "My Nuetering" [sic?] gets right to the point without any fluff, bullshit, or padding. The story's 1,200 words are used well to do what needs to be done. There's just enough description of the setting and characters to ground the story and not leave the reader wondering where and when things are taking place and to whom.
While I like the story a lot, the ending doesn't ring true to me. Once the subject's first testicle is removed his reaction doesn't jive with what's been set up. He's surprised and then says well weve already made it this far, may as well not leave it half done. But nothing in the story to that point makes us expect he would actually want to be castrated; it's a brazen joke to him, with perhaps some latent flirting. But previously he'd never gotten into joking with Rebecca about being neutered and didn't indicate he found the idea arousing. That he has a rule against dating coworkers and that he finds Rebecca attractive suggests he has a normal interest in sex (and, presumably, maintaining his ability to have it). So the ending just doesn't quite work for me as written.
I like the situation in the story, where the character starts down a road where little steps lead to his emasculation and I like Rebecca's confidence in handling him. For the ending, I think I would have it where she gives him a muscle relaxant, putting the needle in his arm and giving him another chance then to back out. He declines and is surprised when she actually pushes the plunger and gives him the injection. He starts getting weaker but still declines to back out, wanting her to be the one who chickens out. But she's given him a bit too much of a dose (perhaps he's a somewhat lightly built guy who, when asked, added a few pounds to his weight to sound more muscular) and can eventually only communicate by blinking. He still declines to call a halt to things and she splits his scrotum. Only after she's fished out a testicle and has the cord between the blades of the surgical scissors does he realize she really is going to do it, but by then the drugs have fully kicked in and he's totally paralyzed. Before removing each testicle she gives him a chance to back out, but, panicking and trying to will his eyes to blink, he can't stop her and loses his balls. Just what I would have done. My bias is always for guys who don't want to be cut.
Good, short story, however. If Sakebigoe is still active and has other ideas for stories, further compositions would, I think, be quite welcome.
While I like the story a lot, the ending doesn't ring true to me. Once the subject's first testicle is removed his reaction doesn't jive with what's been set up. He's surprised and then says well weve already made it this far, may as well not leave it half done. But nothing in the story to that point makes us expect he would actually want to be castrated; it's a brazen joke to him, with perhaps some latent flirting. But previously he'd never gotten into joking with Rebecca about being neutered and didn't indicate he found the idea arousing. That he has a rule against dating coworkers and that he finds Rebecca attractive suggests he has a normal interest in sex (and, presumably, maintaining his ability to have it). So the ending just doesn't quite work for me as written.
I like the situation in the story, where the character starts down a road where little steps lead to his emasculation and I like Rebecca's confidence in handling him. For the ending, I think I would have it where she gives him a muscle relaxant, putting the needle in his arm and giving him another chance then to back out. He declines and is surprised when she actually pushes the plunger and gives him the injection. He starts getting weaker but still declines to back out, wanting her to be the one who chickens out. But she's given him a bit too much of a dose (perhaps he's a somewhat lightly built guy who, when asked, added a few pounds to his weight to sound more muscular) and can eventually only communicate by blinking. He still declines to call a halt to things and she splits his scrotum. Only after she's fished out a testicle and has the cord between the blades of the surgical scissors does he realize she really is going to do it, but by then the drugs have fully kicked in and he's totally paralyzed. Before removing each testicle she gives him a chance to back out, but, panicking and trying to will his eyes to blink, he can't stop her and loses his balls. Just what I would have done. My bias is always for guys who don't want to be cut.
Good, short story, however. If Sakebigoe is still active and has other ideas for stories, further compositions would, I think, be quite welcome.