This is a good story. I hope that in his future stories wantitoff makes his paragraphs shorter. My understanding is that when a different person speaks there should be a new paragraph.

Wantitoff, If you want me to help you with your paragraphs or your spelling, send me an email or a private message. My email address is curious_guy at hush dot com.

This story is listed as [NONE]. I think it should be listed as [G].

I apparently didn't hit the tag hard enough. It's fixed now. Thanks.