your story is off to a great start. looking forward to the continuation.

I just hope the rest of it gets run through a beta reader with a lot of free time and good spell checker. If it hadn't been so interesting, no offense, it never would have made it out.

Reminds me A LOT of someone I used to know through here.

On the button, Paolo... I'm pretty sure it's the guy who was posting wayyyy back in '01 or so.

I admit, I really, really like his stories, although the sytax was pretty lacking. I take it you spent some time to clean this one up? Thanks, very much, if you did, Paolo. I'd hate for this one to have hit the gutter before having a chance to read it .

If I remember correctly, his old stories could be pretty atrocious, with dropped words and kinda non-existant punctuation.

That said, again, I really like certain themes he plays with, although there are stories here on the archive that hit on those themes with a ton of skill, comparatively.

Open note to "ConverseLover" aka a ton of other names: Drop me a message, I'll definitely work with you to clean stuff up before torturing our hard-working Paolo with the task! And hey, even though you are kinda being 'given the gears' in my post here, I really do think you have a ton of good ideas and a wack imagination. Here's looking forward to more!

Drat my silly foot-fetish....

One way to break that fetish is being in charge of athletic cleat recycling and clean-up for redistribution of "gently used" ones...

StefanIsMe (imported) wrote: Mon Mar 30, 2009 8:34 pm On the button, Paolo... I'm pretty sure it's the guy who was posting wayyyy back in '01 or so.

I think the person who wrote this, also wrote the "Summer camp reductions" stories. I liked those stories more than this one because they did not involve feminization.

There are certain clues, such as fascination with soccer, camp, and what type of sneaker ('trainer' for you UK folks, thank JK Rowling & The Fraj that I know that!) 'our heroes' wear. However, the feminization issue deviates from the former style of suspected old author. Not that it matters anymore...I don't care if he comes back and submits stories or even registers.

My part in those matters is over.