I've come up with an idea for a story that I'm having a hard time putting words to. Basically its a herd of horses. The lead stallion is challenged by a young stallion. If he looses then he has to leave with his favorite mare, but if he wins then he has to geld the challenger. He's always won in the past, but this time it's different. This time it's his son. The lead stallion wins and faces the task of gelding his own flesh, something he doesn't want to do, but has to for the good of the herd.
If someone wants to write this then I'm happy to read it
or Some help getting started would be apreciated, either way I'm good
For the good of the herd
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Re: For the good of the herd
The date on this thread says that it's a little old, but it's still on the first page of threads and maybe I can actually help. After all this time the odds aren't bad that theGelded1 has gone ahead and written the story. On the other hand, I've had projects that I have set aside for months, so anything is possible.
One way I like to motivate myself to write is by breaking down a story into small, easy chunks. Let me try that with this idea, as I might write it. Naturally my interpretation might not be exactly what theGelded1 has in mind, but that is the price you pay for not writing it yourself.
Chunk 1: The Setup, where we explain the situation in a concise and brief way. This is a world of anthropomorphic horses, men and women of human shape but horse features, especially horse heads, hooves for feet, horse tails, and fur all over their bodies. They live in a paradise world of temperate weather, lush green fields, and beautiful forests. They have all the food they could ever want and the environment offers them no challenge for survival, so they compete among themselves for entertainment and social status. (This chunk should be kept as short as possible to avoid boring the reader.)
Chunk 2: The Conflict, where we get the reader's attention. After that boring but necessary setup we need to get to the action as quickly as possible. The father is having sex with the most attractive mare available. She is on her hands and knees and he is ramming his remarkably large erection into her from behind. The son is watching this from the concealment of the trees, but once his erection gets big enough he cannot resist stepping forward. He challenges his father for the mare.
Chunk 3: The Confrontation, where we build excitement. The father sets the mare aside to face his son. We discover that the son is seriously better endowed than the father. They talk and we are told about the rules for this sort of thing. The son tells us that the father would be forced to give up the mare if he loses. The father tries to talk the son out of it and warns that he would be castrated if he loses. (The reader sees the personalities of the two stallions and understands the stakes.)
Chunk 4: The Action, where the father and son compete. The competition is in the form of a fist fight. They circle each other for a moment. The son throws out a taunt. The father attacks, but the son is faster, evades, and gives the father a hoof to the butt. "You're getting slow in your old age!" Then the father uses his experience to catch the son by surprise and land a hard punch in the guts. They trade a few punches, then the father knees the son in the balls, ending the fight.
Chunk 5: The End, where the father castrates the son. The father says that he doesn't want to, but now he has to castrate his son. The son is very surprised that the father would actually do it. The son starts out confident and defiant, but then the father gives him a hard punch to the jaw to show that it is serious. The son begs and whimpers. The father stomps on the son's balls with a hoof, crushing them.
And then you can add a sixth chunk with whatever sort of wrap-up you like, if you want one. So that's an outline of how your suggested story might go. I hope it helps your writing.
One way I like to motivate myself to write is by breaking down a story into small, easy chunks. Let me try that with this idea, as I might write it. Naturally my interpretation might not be exactly what theGelded1 has in mind, but that is the price you pay for not writing it yourself.
Chunk 1: The Setup, where we explain the situation in a concise and brief way. This is a world of anthropomorphic horses, men and women of human shape but horse features, especially horse heads, hooves for feet, horse tails, and fur all over their bodies. They live in a paradise world of temperate weather, lush green fields, and beautiful forests. They have all the food they could ever want and the environment offers them no challenge for survival, so they compete among themselves for entertainment and social status. (This chunk should be kept as short as possible to avoid boring the reader.)
Chunk 2: The Conflict, where we get the reader's attention. After that boring but necessary setup we need to get to the action as quickly as possible. The father is having sex with the most attractive mare available. She is on her hands and knees and he is ramming his remarkably large erection into her from behind. The son is watching this from the concealment of the trees, but once his erection gets big enough he cannot resist stepping forward. He challenges his father for the mare.
Chunk 3: The Confrontation, where we build excitement. The father sets the mare aside to face his son. We discover that the son is seriously better endowed than the father. They talk and we are told about the rules for this sort of thing. The son tells us that the father would be forced to give up the mare if he loses. The father tries to talk the son out of it and warns that he would be castrated if he loses. (The reader sees the personalities of the two stallions and understands the stakes.)
Chunk 4: The Action, where the father and son compete. The competition is in the form of a fist fight. They circle each other for a moment. The son throws out a taunt. The father attacks, but the son is faster, evades, and gives the father a hoof to the butt. "You're getting slow in your old age!" Then the father uses his experience to catch the son by surprise and land a hard punch in the guts. They trade a few punches, then the father knees the son in the balls, ending the fight.
Chunk 5: The End, where the father castrates the son. The father says that he doesn't want to, but now he has to castrate his son. The son is very surprised that the father would actually do it. The son starts out confident and defiant, but then the father gives him a hard punch to the jaw to show that it is serious. The son begs and whimpers. The father stomps on the son's balls with a hoof, crushing them.
And then you can add a sixth chunk with whatever sort of wrap-up you like, if you want one. So that's an outline of how your suggested story might go. I hope it helps your writing.