curious_guy (imported) wrote: Sun Mar 22, 2009 3:22 am Don't worry about it. I did the same thing in "Sander's Story - Part 13". I did not notice it until I read parts of it more than a year later.

One of the best writers on the archive has two different stories in which a character's name changed. In one story, Ronny changed to Robby. In the other, Ronnie changed to Robbie.

This type of error is hard to detect in your own writing. It is easier to spot it in someone else's story.

You're so right! It's very hard to detect

Loverboy (imported) wrote: Thu Mar 05, 2009 1:33 pm . Thanks a lot for your comment.

Loverboy

Hey pal...

Loverboy (imported) wrote: Sat Mar 21, 2009 4:38 am I have been thinking about putting a list of all the characters with a short description of them at the beginning of each new chapter. Do you think it would be a good idea? Maybe it would help the readers to better identify each one of them, to know who is who... But maybe, my idea is silly. I don't know...

Loverboy.

First I've to say you worte a real good story. But why name characters before someone can read that story. In my opion its much more exciting to learn about the new characters while reading the story. Your characters still developing and if you don't give such kind of list you're free in writing.

But if you will give a list it should be like this

Alex - Senator of livetime, 20 years

Jason - (former) Slave and friend of Alex, 17 years

Squirt - (former) Slave, Brother of Jason, 13 years

...

Don't tell too much a the begining of the chapter. If you want do put this list somewhere, put it at the end of each chapter.

Great story, keep em cumming!

Stefan (imported) wrote: Sun Mar 22, 2009 9:28 am First I've to say you worte a real good story. But why name characters before someone can read that story. In my opion its much more exciting to learn about the new characters while reading the story. Your characters still developing and if you don't give such kind of list you're free in writing.

But if you will give a list it should be like this

Alex - Senator of livetime, 20 years

Jason - (former) Slave and friend of Alex, 17 years

Squirt - (former) Slave, Brother of Jason, 13 years

...

Don't tell too much a the begining of the chapter. If you want do put this list somewhere, put it at the end of each chapter.

Thanks for your review, dude...

I followed your advice, and so check my next chapter. You will find a list of the main characters and of a few places, but I kept short... and you will find it at the end of the chapter. Of course, it's a "work in progress", and new names might be added to the list as the story progresses...

Again, thanks pal. I really did appreciate your review and comment...

Take good care...

Loverboy.

Loverboy (imported) wrote: Mon Mar 23, 2009 4:22 pm Thanks for your review, dude...

I followed your advice, and so check my next chapter. You will find a list of the main characters and of a few places, but I kept short... and you will find it at the end of the chapter. Of course, it's a "work in progress", and new names might be added to the list as the story progresses...

Again, thanks pal. I really did appreciate your review and comment...

Take good care...

Loverboy.

Again, you're still writing a very good story. The last chapter was brilliant.

The list you put at the end is a good thing, because it gives a map of places and characters.

I'm mpatiently wating for the next chapter.

Brillant work at all ...

Stefan (imported) wrote: Tue Mar 24, 2009 3:02 am Again, you're still writing a very good story. The last chapter was brilliant.

The list you put at the end is a good thing, because it gives a map of places and characters.

I'm mpatiently wating for the next chapter.

Brillant work at all ...

Thank you so much Stefan for your review and nice comments

I really do appreciate that you took the time to write something to me. And I'm glad you liked the last chapter. My next chapter isn't written yet, but as soon as I have some time, I will work on it. I already know what I will write about in the next chapter, but stories like that take time to write.

Take good care my friend...

Loverboy

Another great chapter - thank you

Chapter 9 is fantastic. Great writing. I also like the character listing at the end. It shows the relationships all around. Also shows you don't have to have a big dick to have satisfactory sex.

gandalf (imported) wrote: Tue Mar 24, 2009 6:15 pm Chapter 9 is fantastic. Great writing. I also like the character listing at the end. It shows the relationships all around. Also shows you don't have to have a big dick to have satisfactory sex.

Hey, thanks Gandalf

Loverboy (imported) wrote: Tue Mar 24, 2009 6:15 pm 1236627540]
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Lov [/quote] erboy (imported) wrote:Mon Mar 23, 2009 4:22 pm eview. I'm glad

you like the

character listing at the end of the chapter. Of course, this list is a work in progress as new characters might be added to it as the story progresses...

Keep your comments coming pal... I always appreciate them! Thanks...

Loverboy.

Hey Jean...

It's still early here Sunday morning, and I just opened and read the emails you sent me. I hope you will be able to read this message, cause you said you couldn't get access to your messages at your other email address...

Thanks a lot for explaining to me what happened to you in the Netherlands. It's terrible. What they did to you isn't fair at all. You were treated unjustly. I'm really sorry.

But who pressed charged against you? And why? I understand that you finally made it to Court, but I don't get what happened. Did you get condemned for something, or did they just throw the case away and set you free?

Oh... and trust me, I will never send your message to the board, to be published. Never. I leave it up to you to decide what to tell the readers or not tell them.

Um... in your message, you say you offered me to be my friend and my slave. Maybe I missed something somewhere... but I don't remember you saying anything about being my slave. What do you have in mind when you say you want to be my slave?

You say one of your friends has found a doctor for you who would probably agree to castrate you. Before you do anything, make sure this doctor is a real one and a is a good one. Not a drunk. Run a check on him before you trust him with your balls. Not that we care about your balls... cause they really have to go. What I mean is you have to make sure this doctor does a good job and doesn't leave you with an ugly scar under your dick. Make sure he knows what he's doing, and make sure he leaves you with a nice, smooth spot under your dick. That's what I mean. Oh, and make sure the procedure is done in the right setting, so you don't get infected.

Also, if I am to be your master... I would want you to take a few pictures of your private parts before you have your balls cut off. Like maybe five different pictures, taken at different angles. Some with you hard, and some with you limp. Oh, and don't worry: I don't want to see your face.

I haven't had time to read your new chapter yet. As I have to go out this morning... I will have time to do that later tonight. I'll give you my comments later...

Take good care Pal...

Loverboy.