I had a longer reply to this but I lost it somehow in the process of hurrying out to go to supper... so you will have to settle for this reply...
Waka Gashira (imported) wrote: Tue Jan 12, 2010 10:17 am
Finally, who is to say that the detestable characters in this series won't get what they deserve? Who is to say that benny might not lead an uprising and free all the controlled boys? If a book /could/ be immoral, it ought not be judged until it has Bern given the opportunity to reach a "moral conclusion".
Moral conclusions are not often seen on the E.A. Archive stories. Generally, i
Paolo wrote: Tue Jan 12, 2010 3:15 pm
n stories the damage gets done and then the story is over.
SO help me, you scare the author off and I don't find out how this
all ends, I will come over there and kick your ass, A-1! LOL
Bring your lunch and when you feel froggy start jumpin.
Paolo can I hold your coat? Ernie
Best stay back when somebody gets me going...
Now. With the introductions over I will attempt to post what I DO feel about this.
I IMPLORE each and every one who reads this to visit THIS SITE
and study carefully how the victims react to abuse and the Stockholm Syndrome.
Consider that the ones of us who are really "in to" this story are NOT inexperienced with this subject.
Pick out the lists of the things that abusers do and how the victims of
react to those actions and you will see that all abuse, sexual, physical, mental or some combination of all kinds of abuse follow these patterns to a "T".
As far as the Author goes, I do not think that this critique will stop him/her from finishing this story. If it DOES, I will finish it for you.
How do I know how it ends? Well, maybe I could write a couple of endings.
In one, the abuser Mr. Poore gets busted and he and his little "clique" goes to prison and becomes the BITCHES for the inmate population.
In the other, they continue the abuse, maybe pull a Jeffrey Dahlmer or John Wayne Gacy to make an example to keep their victims shut up, or, maybe they kill ALL of their victims and then they die of old age and the abuse is visited upon another generation of victims as the victims of this story who are lucky enough to survive to adulthood become the abusers to the next generation.
Or, perhaps, the "GHOST STORY" ending in which the victims are silenced by death and they come back to haunt and to visit vengance upon some living relatives of the abusers.
Whatever the ending to the story, the point is that it IS well-written, and if you do not take the chance to learn more about the psychological dynamics of abusers and their victims, you have cheated yourselves of an EXCELLENT MIND-EXPANDING EXPERIENCE that does not require the use of anything harmful.
So we shall wait with "baited breath" awaiting the installments up to and icluding the conclusion of this story and hopefully, we shall all learn from it what a dysfunctional relationship entails.
In a perfect world there would be NO dysfunctional relationships. In a REAL WORLD, however, EVERY relationship is dysfunctional to some degree. However, unless somebody is injured permanently physically, psychologically, functionally or some combination of those, or something illegal is done society will not interfere.
The point at which society interferes gets a lower and lower threshold as time goes by and injustices of the past are recognized and characterized for what they were. ABUSIVE.
Remember, it is NEVER, the victim OR the perpetraitor who makes this judgment that a dysfunctional situation must stop without some kind of outside intervention.
Consider these circumstances AS the intervention.
Carefully consider how the abuse in the story follows to a "T" the characteristics described in
Once again, the website is...