Greetings from Sweden Loverboy =)
First id really like to start of with to say congratulations to you, you have done a thing that so many ppl have failed to do, and that is to capture my complete intrest in a story and that my dear friend hasnt happend many times in my life =).
Mainly i like short stories, you might say stories that really hits the punch at the same time that i starts to find it boring. but in your case you always keep my intrest up and my usual boring novel reading side up. this might seem strange but i kinda like the way ur writting the story, its kinda a sex story/ life time reality story about how impossible/none impossible love/desires can be. does that make any sence to anyone or am i the only one thinking this?
anyways i keep finding parts about my self in this story in all chars, Squirt is me how i was back in those days, Jason is the friend i was willing to sacrifise everything to be with (i think that we all have had one of those friends, male or female) And finally the senator thats me today so to me this story somehow completly shows how i am irl and that to me was kinda funny.
im not reading this story cause of the sex part im reading it cause its always intresting and i like the way ourcharming little devil Squirt makes things happen and he always finds ways to do it somehow. lol brings back so many memories how i used to get ppl to do my dirty bidding as a horny preteen^^.
Loverboy i would deffo say with a bith of more work (witch i might add ur doing great so far really)
id say this is a story that i deffo could see my self buyin if you ever turned it into a book, i think the world needs a few books like this. Cause i think that body modification is something that the world needs to see more off i think the modern world todaylike to hide things that doesnt really fit into our gray normal working lifes.
im sry i just noticed im splitting up the things i wanna say to you loverboy
sry force off habbit back to your story, as i said you have studied your chars well before you did this story cause they arnt boring at all, you have captured alot of the true natures off them, i would evenn like to have some private convos wit you somehow maybe over email, would be really fun to have a discussion with you about this storie
plz let me know if i can have this honor
but for now im gonna bid you farwell and gl on you storie writting, i hope this isnt a short story cause to me its not over by far
keep up the good work and let me know if we can talk over emails i got a few ideas (not for this storie) but id like your opinon on a story that im writtin
take care all and ty for this lovly page
*hugs* Virre
