Timothy (imported) wrote: Tue Nov 16, 2004 1:29 pm Hello everyone

I'm just now finishing up "Summer in Santa Cruz". It should be posted before the end of the week.

Timothy (imported) wrote: Tue Nov 16, 2004 1:29 pm But I have to say something about the Sander comments. These stories on EA are just posted for fun. No one gets paid to write them and no one pays anything to read them.

If you like the stories that's great and if you don't no one is forcing you to read them.

Lets not be too hard on the writters

Timothy

curious_guy (imported) wrote: Tue Nov 16, 2004 2:50 pm That's great! I am looking forward to reading it.

I do not think seiya_boy was being too hard on me. I would like to know why he thinks I got Matti"s and Randal's characters wrong.

The one thing I was most unsure of when I wrote part 8 was how Matti should react when he nullified Randal. Did I get it the way you intended it to go?

The hit count for Sander 8 is now 2487. That probably means that the previous parts got as many hits. I wonder how that compares with other authors.

Slammr (imported) wrote: Tue Nov 16, 2004 1:00 pm By polished, I meant skillful-no grammatical, spelling or syntax errors. I found no fault with your writing. I thought you did an excellent job. The only suggestion I might have is to not write so well. Sander is a young kid. He's going to mess up occasionally. That's part of the charm of Timothy's Sander. He talks like a kid. Could I do better than you have-Hell No! You've done a great job. It's almost impossible to imitate another author's "voice." I would venture to say, though, that if Timothy had posted your story under his name, few, if any of us, would have known you had written it, especially since we knew he was asking for assistance on the story. There's very little difference in Sander's "voice" between part 7 and part 8, but I know Timothy had help on that part.

Here's a paragraph from Sander 3:

I didn't ask if Chris cried or not.* I didn't really want to know.* Soon Ben and my dad came to find us and take us to Ben's place for the evening. I was sort of sorry to leave the other kids. I wanted to spend more time with them and find out if what Chris was saying was true, although I could see no reason for him to lie.

Normally, I wouldn't use "sort of," when writing, but a kid would. I think that such slight grammatical mistakes add to Sander's voice.