g to come out using the formula you just described.CircItaly (imported) wrote: Tue May 25, 2021 5:15 am That's because your stories usually don't progress. Don't take it wrong, all your production is absolutely lovely, but at 8th chapter I know you will introduce new character and nobody get snipped.
I know is emotionally hard go through a similar narrative junction but readers needs conclusion. You can easily skip graphic parts but
Hey @CircItaly,
You make some valid points on the way a story should develop. Multi-part stories are even more difficult to write because at the end of each part there needs to be a conclusion to the theme of that part and a foreshadowing of what will happen next.
Please write some stories and post time. You always have good suggestions and I know there is a great story inside you waitin
TMFL
That's the point of the story I'm writing, which at the current glacial pace should be out sometime in 2046. You have to bring people along, and have some hint of what is coming next, or that a conclusion will happen. New characters are o.k., as long as they fit in somehow and are not going to simply be there for something else to write about not related to the story.
In the case of my story, which is still in the sketch stage, I'm actually starting out with the conclusion (life post-nullification), and using that as a mechanism to get at the larger story. It goes into detail about how the two characters came to their conclusion to get nullified, the thrill and anguish of their lives in childhood through adulthood as they navigate their feelings behind the changes they wish to/will undergo, then towards the later chapters the surgeries to become nullos happen.
In your case, you write what strikes you in the moment to write, I believe I called it "stream of conciousness" writing a few comments back. That can often give some interesting stories on a single-part story, but for multi-part stories, sometimes is best to at least sketch out what the conclusion is, and work to it over the multiple parts. You do fairly well writing, but perhaps by giving yourself an idea of what the conclusion to the story is before you start writing, you'll have a better ability to work the story to a conclusion and work within your own personal writing style.
If you watched Mad Men (on AMC Network in USA), when that series started, the creators knew how it was to end before they got there. They had that sketched out at the beginning, then made the show fit into the number of seasons/series they were given to produce it. They always knew that despite starting the show in 1960, that it would end with the famous 1971, "I'd like to buy the world a Coke..." ad.
For your writing, I really like Doppleganger, save for the borderline snuff aspects. I get that to have the Doppelganger, a death may be necessary, but I can also see other options. How you wrote Devlin was great... There is a logical reason he was reanimated after death (dying due to the water accident in the lake). That made a lot of sense, in the future/sci-fi aspects, a family has a child "scanned" so if some tragedy befalls them, they can order themselves up a Doppelganger replacement and continue on. When I brought the death element up a while ago, that was not me saying don't write it, but be aware of the guidelines of the archive as you do so. Kirby is already there, but perhaps a future character could have a legitimate reason for being euthanised other than they just want be part of the exhibit, and have the Doppelganger resume their life as if nothing happened. A new character... I'm thinking they have some sort of incurable disease, so that's what brings them to volunteer for the process you write about. In exchange for offering their original terminally ill body for display, they get their disease cured through the doppelganger process, then resume their life in a healthy body.
At the moment, and I know this is a recent story, the story is hanging like many others on the story archive, but I think you have a reasonable chance to conclude it in a good and meaningful way.
The points made by TopManFL and CircItaly are valid... In a multi-part story, you have to give the readers some mystery, but also a reasonable expectation they will have something to come read in the next installment that makes clicking it open worth their while.
Of course, like always, write because you wish to, not because you're looking for something from others. That's why it seems like my story is taking 25 years to write.
