I agree with TopMan that a re-write isn't necessary - it just sounded like you had some of your own ideas you wish you would've added to the first installment. That said, these can always be addressed in a sequel!

I do think that it may be too convenient to just have the wolf show up to replace coach in gym first thing... maybe the team finds out first and, through their antics with Zach, the coach finds out. Maybe coach arrives to catch one of Zach's big bad wolf classmates stuck to Zach and dragging him around the lockers and notices he's missing parts and the fresh injury? Speaking of which, how does Zach handle the medical emergency he now finds himself in? As a minor, if he went to go get treated at the hospital they'd most certainly contact the parents and police. How would he explain what happened? Since he really didn't do anything WRONG and this wasn't something he actively sought or volunteered for, I don't see him covering for the wolf at the club, but its your story!

I can definitely see a tough adjustment ahead for that poor fox. I think it'll be much harder on him since this isn't something he's ever thought about before. Seeing all the classmates he used to brag in front of before now much more masculine than he'll ever hope to be again..

@TopMan, Hi again, thanks for the ideas! I definitely imagine Zack having a panic attack on his first day back at school, as you say, and I also love the idea of him stuffing things down the front of his underwear to hide his sudden dearth of genitalia (only for his empty crotch to be humiliatingly revealed at some point, of course). I personally prefer the humiliation aspect, in the sense that I would want to make it as humiliating as possible for Zack, so I probably would keep him reluctant to accept his fate as a eunuch. That's a good point about Zack's parents, though, it would be interesting to see how they react to finding out. Maybe another aspect could be that Zack's dad was secretly jealous and threatened by the fact that his son was better-hung than him, so he could also take a certain guilty pleasure in how Zack's been taken down a peg (I actually also posted a story on here with a similar theme to this called "Kas' Kock is Kut" back when I had a different account, if anyone's interested, just saying).

A sequel to "Dear Mama Kite" would also be interesting, and I like the humour in the Tabasco idea! This could make things interesting between Marty and his brother, as Marty would probably feel resentful that he had to lose everything down there while his brother only gets what he perceives as lesser punishments, whereas the brother might also be resentful of Marty's resentment when he is living in torment constantly having his boy bits tortured by their stepdad.

@Chris

That's true, I don't think I fleshed out the immediate aftermath well enough. Perhaps the wolf security guard has corrupt friends in the local police department who will cover for him if Zack tries to press charges, maybe even concoct a smear story about how Zack was actually unmaled by some girl he was trying to rape, or something like that.

And yes, you're right it will be a tough adjustment. Personally I especially like the idea of him having a sudden awareness of how poetically ironic everyone will think it is that he's lost the very bits he used to brag about the most, and being overcome by dread of anyone finding out as a result.

tempdownload (imported) wrote: Tue Oct 15, 2019 9:33 pm @fancyfeller great stories

I have an idea that few write about..... Can you write a few stories - or include in your stories - where the young guy has his ultra sensitive circumcised cockhead glans cut off (first/separately) very slowly and painfully at the worst time: when his glans cap is the most engorged and flaring (right before he's about to cum).

Hey @tempdownload,

Great idea. I've seen you suggest it many times to many authors and it's been a really good idea every time you've suggested it.

You seem to have a passion for stories where a glansectomy takes place - and that fits right into the intended themes of stories for the fiction archives.

I'd suggest you write the story. With your burning desire to see stories with that topic, nobody could write it better than you could. You already know what you wat to see in the story, how you want the character treated, that you'd like it to be a circumcised guy that first loses his cockhead and then his whole penis or perhaps just his balls.

I've also seen many of your posts expressing frustration that authors don't take your suggestion to include cutting off the cock's head first. For a great story to work, the author has to have a passion for the topic.

@tempdownload, you have that passion and a huge desire to see stories where a circumcised 'Murican guy has his cock head taken off.

I say, write the story and publish it. You'll get better at writing stories as you do more and more. I know you want stories with the cockhead first taken off and then a penectomy, castration or nullification. That is good because, I don't think a glansectomy story alone would qualify for the fiction section - but, it's good because your story will include castration or nullification.

I'm really looking forward to your story @tempdownload. You have an interest in the topic that will make the story really interesting. Let me know when your story is published.