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gandalf (imported)
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Really hot story. But it makes me wonder if the way Jonny is now will make Matt want to change to a bottom.
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Thanks. I already have the second part written (I wrote it all in one, but decided to split it into two, for the sake of making you all read a 27 page story all in one sitting), but if you have any suggestions to add into the story, I can write them in (or they may already be in there)

anything?

also, how is my writing style and flow, sometimes I feel like its off, but it could just be me, this story took me three weeks to write, so I did spent a lot of extra time on it
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I liked the story but I do not think it would be so hard for the bottoms to cum. The style is quite good and much better than the swim team story which seemed rushed.
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Post by stubbs (imported) »

I enjoyed "Toppers" and the way you tell the story. It was great the way Matt still wanted to try and f*** Johnny even though he had given up his cock. I would love to read some more stories about the club Toppers and the guys that are members. Maybe the club decides to film a porno...Or the club gets 'raided'. How did 'Toppers' come into inexistance. Even follow some of the members as they decide to visit a normal nudist camp or gaybars to recruit new members. There just seems to be lots of possibilities for your characters to explore.
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