Charlieje,
In the latest episode, the paragraph that begins "It was almost 10 PM" seems to be misplaced. In that paragraph, Tim has arrived at Nate's house. A few paragraphs later, Laura is advising him to go there.
Cheers,
Peter
Tim's Last Orgasm (29): Paragraph out of order
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Re: Tim's Last Orgasm (29): Paragraph out of order
Thanks, Peter. No, nothing is out of place, just my attempt (obviously unsuccessful) to explain after the fact what Tim was doing there in the first place.
I am having to disassemble all of my computers except my laptop for a few days while we remodel, and I'm afraid I was in a bit of a rush to get that chapter posted before the big shutdown. I guess I didn't proof it as well as I usually do.
I am having to disassemble all of my computers except my laptop for a few days while we remodel, and I'm afraid I was in a bit of a rush to get that chapter posted before the big shutdown. I guess I didn't proof it as well as I usually do.