gandalf (imported) wrote: Thu Apr 09, 2009 9:35 am
Have read Chapter 11. I am definitely glad everything has turned out o.k. for Ales...so far. I can see in the story the love, compassion,and feelings for others that are apparent in Peter's handling of the soldier who did so much bad. I imagine that nothing was said about the decapitated soldier (by Jason)
because of the soldier(s) being in the wrong. I'm am wondering if the soldier Will (I think is the name) who did not participate in the assault will ultimately want to join the conclave at the Island.
Outstanding story. Thinking of printing it off as it goes to have to read anytime. (Have to get new ink cartridges before I can do that).
First of all: You did again a great chapter of the whole story. But many things aren't told yet.
What will happen to Henry in future? Of course the character of Alex is a very social one. Some chapters earlier you wrote, that Alex is working on a law against slavery and forced castrations for slaves (if I rember right). Will Alex change his opinion in that case?
Jason rescued a Senator of Livetime. What kind of gratificaton will he get. I'm not asking, what will Alex will give him - there is no question, because Alex loves Jason very much. But what will the officials do, there should be some thanks from them.
Whats about Private Will? He was involved in that rape. Will he get a punshiment?
You've still some not told story-lines, e. g. John and Jake, Peter and Squirt (or Peter and Henry?

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Especially Peter is only two chapters on the island. Peters assistant William has an untold story, too. How came William to Kristina Island
Its possible that there will be an increasing of the character of Peter.
As you see, there many things can be told
