Lost Virginity and It to a Bug! [S] Anonymous 2002-01-14

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Paolo
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Lost Virginity and It to a Bug! [S] Anonymous 2002-01-14

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This story was so strange that I had to read it again and comment! I like the idea of HOW the boy saw the bug, so as not to spoil it for others. The idea of his "phallus" or perhaps, "mojo" being taken, if you think Austin Powers, is a very good plot twist as well. English is not the Author's first language, but he did a pretty good job, and it's readable, and really - strangely enjoyable!

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Re: Lost Virginity and It to a Bug! [S] Anonymous 2002-01-14

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Just when you think you've heard it all comes an LSD parody on

Lewis Carol from an educated Oriental. If nothing else this writer

has an imagination that really kicks! His command of English is better

than might be expected from someone that learned it as a second language.

Even though it may be a drug induced hallucination, it will be interesting to see where he goes with it!

However, I think a better title for the story would be: Go Ask Alice.......!

Master Waddie :p
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Re: Lost Virginity and It to a Bug! [S] Anonymous 2002-01-14

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Having written in a second language, I can attest to how difficult it is. This is a great job, and it should only get easier and better with practice. Keep up the good work.
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