Time to Start Posting Again. (Hopefully)

[CircItaly (imported)]

In this last chapter your show us dozen of dicks but you never describe one. I don't asking for porn details, but dicks have their own personality, i would like know them before it is too late! Maybe the kids can do a size contest, once all their dicks is on the trophy wall at school!

[Atreyu69 (imported)]

In this last chapter your show us dozen of dicks but you never describe one. I don't asking for porn details, but dicks have their own personality, i would like know them before it is too late! Maybe the kids can do a size contest, once all their dicks is on the trophy wall at school!

I agree with you. There's a great deal of individuality amounts dicks; size, shape, cut or natural and what have you. But unless they're horribly deformed each one is beautiful in its own way because each one has it's own "personality." From a fictional point of view would a boy lose that part of his personality once he's been nullified? It's an interesting idea to explore. A small boy with a really big dick might feel that he has more to lose.

[Atreyu69 (imported)]

Gotta say, that new Theo was awesome. You are the current master of that sort of deep-dive-to-a-cliff-hanger chapter ending, and you make stars sparkle in my head each time you do it. This time more than most.

I just love your particular style where it comes to story escalation and the way you portray boy life. Your dialogue may be a little on the stilted/over-erudite side, but the actions and emotions are usually great fun to read because they read true. They feel right, they fit, and you don't exaggerate a physically perfect protagonist. You make things relatable.

(following is just me riffing on the story; don't take this as if I'm saying you should write this! I'm just playin';)

I have to hope for a solid attack on the next chapter. I know there is a temptation now to left-turn into a related B-story that only obliquely refers to what just happened; it's a good tactic. But here, I'd like to see something like a staccato-style, two-camera chapter. Like, for instance, show the car occupant's next hour step by step in one- or two-paragraph bits, interspersed with two-paragraph bits about the meeting the lady driver and Theo's mom probably had with the other team's coach. Some method that tells the story of the next little while in the boy's lives in a slowed down way... but gets us through it within a chapter or two.

Something that makes you fun to read is your metered escalation of story, how you bring in other characters to push the narrative forward, and the way you increase the number and range of 'victims' as chapters progress. I can see the start of that in Theo, and hope it continues .

Thanks for a great chapter, man. My vote is for more of Theo!

I'm really glad you liked the story and I always hope for feedback such as yours. Sometimes the writing can be challenging. I'm trying to capture the range of emotions I felt when I was a boy suffering from a bad case of castration anxiety. Horror and fear of course but also excitement and awe. Fearing for my stuff was terrifying but thrilling. The strangest thing was a part of me actually wanted it to happen.

[Paolo]

If you're having trouble capturing "boy speak," watch the 3 "Diary of a Wimpy Kid" movies.

"Good Boys" is also a good one for picking up "the lingo".

That, or you can always help raise 5-6 of them. But that's not cheap.

[CircItaly (imported)]

I wish be more accurate in my review but my English skills aren't going so far. But your story really mess up something inside me

[kristoff]

If you're having trouble capturing "boy speak," watch the 3 "Diary of a Wimpy Kid" movies.

"Good Boys" is also a good one for picking up "the lingo".

That, or you can always help raise 5-6 of them. But that's not cheap.

Experience speaks LOUDLY !

Unfortunately, I don't have that experience -- my boys grew up in Pennsylvania. I can't even do much spoiling on my only grandson -- he lives in VA.

[CircItaly (imported)]

By the way I'm reading your old stories. I just read for the first time pink boy. Gosh, i wish so bad someone takes care Terry's phimosis

[jamiepan (imported)]

If you're having trouble capturing "boy speak," watch the 3 "Diary of a Wimpy Kid" movies.

"Good Boys" is also a good one for picking up "the lingo". ...

Holy shit... Good Boys was a freakin' RIOT. Did they pick the perfect child actors or what? I saw the blond kid on Kimmel, I think, and he talked about the swearing; apparently, he (the blond) and the chunky kid had no problem with the parent's rules about no swearing off set, but the other kid, the dark-haired one, just wouldn't stop the F-bombs once he started on-screen . Very few movies made me laugh that hard in the last couple of years.

The blond kid has range, too. As hilarious and natural as an 'average kid' he seems in Good Boys, that's the same kid as was in... I don't know the name of the movie, but.... the movie where a mother and son are kidnapped and locked in a room for years; the boy has really long hair and escapes from the bed of a truck towards the end. Kid played an absolutely haunting roll as a kidnapped child, trying to keep himself and his mother together.

I can hardly believe it's the same kid in both movies.

[Paolo]

Jacob Tremblay.

He's also 12 year old Scott Lang in "Avengers: Endgame"

I think the other film is "The Room".

[Atreyu69 (imported)]

Jacob Tremblay.

He's also 12 year old Scott Lang in "Avengers: Endgame"

I think the other film is "The Room".

Jacob Tremblay played the part of the boy who was killed by the bad people in the sequel to the Steven King movie The Shining; Doctor Sleep. The murder in Doctor Sleep was so horrible that it turned some people off on the film.