Dear readers, even if you don't read Chinese please do Google translate it and give me some comments!
Without comments I don't know if I should continue to write or not... so please!
The Boy Peeing on the Grass
https://eunuchworld.co/s14827
The Boy at the New Year Countdown
https://eunuchworld.co/s14826
Two new Chinese stories
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Re: Two new Chinese stories
kwanmingmin (imported) wrote: Sat Mar 03, 2018 6:16 am Dear readers, even if you don't read Chinese please do Google translate it and give me some comments!
The translation was pretty rough, but I think I got the idea.
My impression is that you have an interesting premise, or alternative universe if you will. It might be good to go into a bit of technical details, like how they expect to get new babies with all boys castrated. It might also be good to introduce some dramatic tension and its resolution. It might also be interesting to read how eunuch boys interact with older non-eunuchs, or what their life is like after they become adults, whether there are non-obvious ways they live their lives that are different from their non-eunuch predecessors, whether they are bullied or teased, and so forth.
Those are suggestions or observations, not criticisms.
I do think you should continue.
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