The Burdizzo by VeeJay

[Charlieje (imported)]

Great story!

I have been doing very little reading lately - writing and editing like a fiend - but this one somehow caught my eye and I read it this morning. I was NOT disappointed.

VeeJay has made the story long enough to give us all the necessary details, gave us some empathy for the abused boy, yet it was not so long that it could not be read entirely in one sitting. Great job, VeeJay!

[Dave (imported)]

I echo Charlieje's comments - - Nice story, well written, not too long, not too short and all the right elements.

Dave

[jamie6369 (imported)]

I agree with the above comments - excellent story.

I had to go out after reading parts 1 and 2, could not wait to get back and finish it!

Jamie.

[VeeJay (imported)]

Thanks guys!

I'm pretty new to short story writing and your postsare a great confidence builder. When I read my own stories I always think of things I should have put in, or left out, or did wrong. For instance I was afraid I'd made Jim sound to mature for a 14 year old. That's because it's been 61 years since I was 14;)

[robbie1042 (imported)]

Hey VeeJay

I really enjoyed your story, You did just fine:)