With this story, Nathan continues to write some of the best turn-on stories here. At least they turn me on. This is true partly because he takes the time to make both the situation and the people come alive. By the time you reach the inevitable conclusion, you really feel for his character and you believe in the world he inhabits.
Once again, Nathan, I admire your imagination and your mastery of your craft as a writer. Thanks again for sharing your work with us (and for giving me hours of hand-pumping pleasure!).
2052-The Birthday by Nathan
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Re: 2052-The Birthday by Nathan
I also really liked this story.
I tohught it was an especially effective
device to have the hero watch pornographic vignettes (that
means readers have to "watch" them, too, which means we are reacting as
he reacts, which means we are getting
into the story). And having them be
from a wide variety of situations was also very smart since a wide variety of people read the archive. I was so into it by the end that I was actually personally outraged by the cock-staple .
I mean, if all they cared about was preventing breeding, then that was just gratuitously sadistic.
I mean, I'm sure the guy in the story
was supposed to feel the same way,
so I guess it was effective on me, as
a story, but still, it sort of begs for a
sequel, which could go in any number
of different ways. In one, it turns out that some evil people in power have
some deep dark evil reason
for the stapling; in another, some guys
manage to get it out and still have
fun without breeding; or (my personal
favorite) some guys decide that nullo
is better and *happily* "alter" their
staple just enough to get the government to "give" them a "free"
penectomy out of it. After which they
live happily ever after.
In any case, thanks for a great story.
I tohught it was an especially effective
device to have the hero watch pornographic vignettes (that
means readers have to "watch" them, too, which means we are reacting as
he reacts, which means we are getting
into the story). And having them be
from a wide variety of situations was also very smart since a wide variety of people read the archive. I was so into it by the end that I was actually personally outraged by the cock-staple .
I mean, if all they cared about was preventing breeding, then that was just gratuitously sadistic.
I mean, I'm sure the guy in the story
was supposed to feel the same way,
so I guess it was effective on me, as
a story, but still, it sort of begs for a
sequel, which could go in any number
of different ways. In one, it turns out that some evil people in power have
some deep dark evil reason
for the stapling; in another, some guys
manage to get it out and still have
fun without breeding; or (my personal
favorite) some guys decide that nullo
is better and *happily* "alter" their
staple just enough to get the government to "give" them a "free"
penectomy out of it. After which they
live happily ever after.
In any case, thanks for a great story.