Help with new a story

[g_boy222 (imported)]

So I have written my second story called "College Sports", but since my English is not very good and I know that I tend to make a lot of syntactical and expressional mistakes, would anyone(preferably American) be willing to take a look and point them out before I send it to the archives?

Thanks

[curious_guy (imported)]

You might be more likely to get help if you mention what type of story you are writing.

[g_boy222 (imported)]

Oh right, straight genre with maledom. Is this what you asked?

[DeaconBlues (imported)]

I just sent you a private message, if you want to just email the story to me, I will do my best at proof reading it for you.

[Losethem (imported)]

I've helped out our friend with the story and have read it and edited it for him. He did a darn good job of writing an English language story given English is a second language for him. I had to change the tense on some words and rework a few sentences, but overall even without that it was readable and readily understood by an English speaking audience.

Good Job g_boy222, it was a good read! I've e-mailed the edited version back to you.

--LT