The White Van Cometh By: Josh

[curious_guy (imported)]

This is a good start to a story. I hope Josh finishes it.

I think that Tyler should ask Cecil why he had everything removed and not just his balls. Tyler should think of having just his balls removed before he decides to be nullified.

I think there should be a scene in which Tyler has to be nude in front of many other boys. Maybe his father takes him skinny-dipping. Maybe he has to shower at the public pool. Do 11 year-old boys ever shower after P.E. (I did not shower after P.E. until I was in ninth grade.)?

Tyler should show his friends that he has been nullified and try to convince them to get their junk removed too.

I am available to beta-read Josh's stories if he wants me to. I always have at least one person beta-read my stories.

In one or both of these interviews, David Brin says that he always has at least 30 people beta-read his stories.

http://hour25online.com/Hour25_Previous ... 2001-07-27

http://hour25online.com/Hour25_Previous ... 2002-03-03

[curious_guy (imported)]

Maybe Tyler's father should take him to a nudest colony two weeks after Tyler is nullified. Tyler would be upset about other boys seeing him until he notices that 20 percent of the boys there are castrated or nullified.

Maybe he should see boys who were penectomized only because they masturbated too much.

Maybe he and the other nullos should try to convince complete boys to get nullified.

[StefanIsMe (imported)]

Thanks for the postings, Josh! Good to see you submitting again, and I look forward to any more of this (or any other!) story of yours.

Thank you!

[bella (imported)]

Thanks for the story Josh

Looking forward to more of it

[gandalf (imported)]

Have enjoyed both chapters so far. Looking forward to the next instllment. I enjoy your stories very much.

[curious_guy (imported)]

Maybe Tyler's father tries to get his friends to have their sons nullified. As part of the process, he makes Tyler show the parents and the son (or sons) his smooth crotch. Maybe Tyler likes it.

[Coyan Hyde (imported)]

Great series! You're doing an excellent job with the I-think-I want-to-do-this-but-now-that-it's-actually-happening-I'm-not-so-sure angle.

[caultron (imported)]

You have a good start with this story through episode 5. The original premise, in which Tyler is repeatedly abused sexually and thereby muses about becoming nom-sexual, is an interesting twist.

In addition, there are plenty of questions to keep readers reading. Here are some that've occurred to me but please don't answer them here in the board -- they're much better in the story.

Is Cecil the chat board moderator really null?

Is Cecil just a chat board moderator, or does he have some connection with he nullification movement and/or the white vans?

Has Ron been nullified? His answers about nullification seem evasive.

Did Ron invite Taylor to a sleepover in order to show Taylor his condition?

Is Victor, as rumored, actually null? If so, what's his story and what's going on with him now?

Kevin was intact last winter but is he still?

What's the significance of the canvas sacks? Why those instead of longer-lasting tranquilizer shots, or handcuffs, or...?

If more and more boys are going nullo, it seems that sooner or later the trend will have to become more public. Nullos will get found out, or come out, or their parents will expose them, or whatever. And it seems nullos would seek other out for solace and support. You could develop quite a lot of plot around this process.

So, interesting story! Please keep going!

[gandalf (imported)]

Chapter 6 . An excellent continuation of the story. Will be anxious to read more.

[bella (imported)]

good continuation in chapter 6 - looking forward to the next chapters