Summer Camp Revenge/Reductions

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Summer Camp Revenge/Reductions

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I posted an edited version of this story about four months ago. It had some good ideas and characters but there were some things that bothered me.

1. The machine that shrunk the boys' penises also shrunk their feet. Feet are mostly bone. I do not see any way that a non magical device could shrink feet that quickly. If it shrunk the feet, why didn't it shrink the hands or other parts of the skeleton?

2. Randy told the boys that he had shrunk Timmy's penis. Timmy was forced to show the boys his shrunken penis. I think that Timmy would have then told the boys that Randy now had no penis and no testicles.

3. If the events described at the end of the story really happened, there would be a tremendous reaction that would make a "shitstorm" look like nothing. Hundreds or maybe even thousands, of law enforcement personnel, social workers and reporters etc. would descend on the camp like a swarm of locusts.
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