Doctor Talbot's Medical Research Dept.

[SquirmEWorm (imported)]

Promising. Look forward to further installments.

[Paolo]

This one almost didn't make it because the dialogue was all run together.

Let's hope our author sees this and breaks it up next time!

Thanks for commenting, though. We need more comments.

[SquirmEWorm (imported)]

I submitted a very short story a while back that was mostly dialogue and I didn't bother to quote any of it and it took 3 tries to get it accepted and then I found quotes had been added somewhat willy-nilly. Just thought I throw that in.

Anyway, this story looks good. Hope it doesn't develop into something that involves the castratrix rolling up her shirt sleeves

I'd write more stories but I'm on the road and don't own a laptop :-\

Love the Archive, though. It's one of the things I believe in the most in this messed up modern world.

Hogs and kisses from Arkansas!

[Paolo]

Generally, I don't add in quotes.

Guidelines have been posted here long enough, and anyone who's read a book in the first grade should know how to use them.

Ch. 2 was just as much of a mess, with different characters all talking without breaks, so 3 will go right to the trash if it shows up in the same manner.

[Slammr (imported)]

Generally, I don't add in quotes.

Guidelines have been posted here long enough, and anyone who's read a book in the first grade should know how to use them.

Ch. 2 was just as much of a mess, with different characters all talking without breaks, so 3 will go right to the trash if it shows up in the same manner.

I agree with Paolo. It's also one of my pet peeves. It's not that hard: if someone new speaks, start a new paragraph.

[SquirmEWorm (imported)]

Yes, I suppose you're right. Sigh.

Just read installment #2 and it's very tasty. Be a shame to junk subsequent ones due to formatting technicalities.

I just read a John Silver book, btw, from Tawsingham called "Made To Maid". It's got a castration story in it that's OK, but the overall femdom tone and content is very good, for those who like such things.

On the other hand, I recently got a Pink Flamingo book by Orlando called "Humilated Men" that was rubbish. Just a lot of ugly, grotesque, brutal women. There are a few penectomies, though, for those into them.

[Paolo]

We had a Pink Flamingo (allegedly) novel posted here.

Painfully long and quite boring by the time I gave it up, although it was promising to begin with.

With no email link, there's no way to tell the writer to clean it up, though.

I would be willing to take a volunteer/fan who knows how to use paragraphs and quotation marks to fix the next part, however.

[SquirmEWorm (imported)]

Sure, Id be happy to volunteer for story clean-up duties.

That guy who posted the novel from Pink Flamingo is a real piece of work, alright. I have a whole blog that's partially devoted to telling him off;

http://analnematode.blogspot.com/

Chris Bellows is his name and he's written over 30 crappy porn novels

for Pink Flamingo. He took one of my negative comments on the Archive

forum to heart and sent me a long e-mail detailing how he was the grooviest,

sexiest author that ever lived, just for my info, ya know. This spurred me

to spew out all my hate and bile about him online in the above blog.

The blog has other general sex stuff, too, stuff that I like. Althought

I know no one has the time or interest to read blogs. I know I don't.

Let me kow if I can help, Paolo.

[SquirmEWorm (imported)]

Installment #3's getting a little heavy handed. The lack of suspense takes a lot of the excitement out of the story. Still, it's worth reading. Maybe the author will through a nice quirk in later on. I hope so.

[SquirmEWorm (imported)]

Installment #4 was OK. The ham-fistedness continues to be less than beguiling.

Whatever happened to Abelard, BTW? Maybe Talbot's is Abelard. Abelard was a Limey, too.