Walker County High School Incident By: Artistic License

[curious_guy (imported)]

Maybe the aliens discover that teen penises taste extremely good or have good drug properties so they send down collection devices to locker rooms all over the world. The devices cause boys to eagerly stick their penises in them.

The aliens come back every month or so and collect 20 or 30 thousand penises each time. Almost all boys are worried that a collection device will show up in their locker room and they will be unable to resist the urge to give up their penis.

[Paolo]

This reminds me a lot of the Star Trek pilot "The Cage," where the Talosians found the only survivor, the lady, of the exploratory ship and healed her. But they had no clue what a human was supposed to look like, and they ALMOST got her right. It's still a very fun read, though!

[curious_guy (imported)]

This reminds me a lot of the Star Trek pilot "The Cage," where the Talosians found the only survivor, the lady, of the exploratory ship and healed her. But they had no clue what a human was supposed to look like, and they ALMOST got her right.

I was also reminded of that episode. The episode always bothered me. The Talosians were human like with small bodies and big heads. Wouldn't they assume (correctly) that she was a bilaterally symmetrical humanoid like they were? Also they would have had all the bodies of the dead crew members to examine. Surely some would have undamaged upper torsos and some would have undamaged lower torsos.

The story would only work if they were very different from humans. For example if they were worms, blobs or octopuses, the story would work.

[Paolo]

The writers didn't think of stuff like that.

In the case of this story, with the aliens being insectoids, it works.

A lot of time in Trek, it was like "why don't they just shoot a torpedo, then?" or "Why can't they take a shuttle?"

[P.P.Herz (imported)]

In general, stories featuring amputation of parts other than genitals -- fingers, limbs, etc. -- for fetishistic purposes creep me out. Once, before I found eunuch.org, I wound up reading a "Nifty" story (though it wasn't on the actual Nifty site) that turned out to feature S/M slaves modified against their will into deaf, blind, mute eunuchs barely able to move due to arm and foot amputations, and which has lingered unpleasantly in my mind similar to the way images like "goatse" or "shitting dick-nipples" can't be un-seen.

This story, with its fantasy (literary genre) spin on amputation, sounds not just less-skin-crawling but interesting. Ordinarily the header-warnings on a story like this would keep me away, but from the reactions in this thread, I think I would find it interesting and non-traumatic. Thanks to everyone else who contributed their impressions!

The episode always bothered me. The Talosians were human like with small bodies and big heads. Wouldn't they assume (correctly) that she was a bilaterally symmetrical humanoid like they were? [...] The story would only work if they were very different from humans. For example if they were worms, blobs or octopuses, the story would work.

Yeah, I noticed that same problem, even as a kid. I had wondered, though, whether the screenplay as originally written called for non-humanoid Talosians, and some variety of Hollywoodification (either budgetary constraints or the kind of studio-executive douchery that insisted female crewmembers in TOS be restricted to the roles of glorified switchboard operator, secretary and nurse) led to the version seen in "The Cage"/"The Menagerie" -- and according to Memory Alpha's article on the episode (http://memory-alpha.org/en/wiki/The_Cag ... production), I guessed right:

In Gene Roddenberry's original conception, the Talosians were crab-like aliens. This would have been prohibitively expensive and probably unconvincing, so they became humanoids instead.

Apparently Roddenberry, who wrote the script himself, intending it to be the pilot episode of the show he envisioned, forgot to change the line about the Talosians having no model for humanoid anatomy -- the script went through a ridiculous number of rewrites before and during production -- or maybe just chose to leave it in despite its not really making sense with the effects that wound up being used for both the aliens and Vina.

[curious_guy (imported)]

The writers didn't think of stuff like that.

In the case of this story, with the aliens being insectoids, it works.

I still do not buy it. Here is how I think it would happen:

"Is this appendage a severed part of the creature?" The ensign asked holding up an arm.

"No, it can't be. The creature has a part like that. If we cut off this part here," the exobioligist touched Benny's arm just above his elbow, "we'd get one of those and the creature would have a short part left with an internal exoskeleton. The creature does not have a short part that this would attach to."

Also, if the aliens attached parts from other humans to Benny, his immune system would start attacking the parts immediately. The parts would be dead in minutes.

[artisticlicense (imported)]

I found this story to be silly and fun. It was like a cartoon where the characters have fun, lots of laughs, don't mention future ramifications, and it's just an enjoyable and silly thing to entertain.

EXACTLY! Thank you blondboy, sweet of you to say.

I'd like to see a standalone sequel where the "Collector" realizes he messed up with the boy

who came through, when he has another mission on Earth.

I'll keep that in mind, and I do have something in mind. Need to dust off the Sci-Fi section of my brain.

I almost wish I hadn't ended the story with "...we never did see Benny again." Might need a suggestion there.

It's entertaining to see the reactions, and comments. Making notes.

I thought the story was rather cute and funny. Of course, it wasn't realistic, and not every story has to examine how a kid

reacts to being nullified.

As far as what kids would and wouldn't do...

Thank you & 10

/4...I'd send flowers if I knew where (Kidding!)

...his immune system would start attacking the parts immediately. The parts would be dead in minutes. Close, but no ...the "dead in minutes" would 'hurt' the fantasy. My head is spinning.

...

magical, Twilight Zone-ish hamper can not only painlessly remove body-parts, but that it also, somehow, causes a completely inappropriate response...

Gold Star! Head of the class!

I had a FANTASITCAL thought and had to 'go with it'.

Thanks for the public feed back. Thanks for the 'mail'.

This is fun.

[curious_guy (imported)]

I'll keep that in mind, and I do have something in mind. Need to dust off the Sci-Fi section of my brain.

I almost wish I hadn't ended the story with "...we never did see Benny again." Might need a suggestion there.

I think you should just write your sequel and pretend that you did not write

"...we never did see Benny again." .

After all: A foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of little minds, adored by little statesmen and philosophers and divines.

Ralph Waldo Emerson (1803-82), U.S. essayist, poet, philosopher. Essays, "Self-Reliance" (First Series, 1841).

By the way, how did you manage to quote several people in your message? Is there a function of V-Bulletin that I have not yet learned?

[artisticlicense (imported)]

By the way, how did you manage to quote several people in your message? Is there a function of V-Bulletin that I have not yet learned?

Each time you quote someone, the bulletin lists everyone posting (there are limits as to what shows, don't know how much).

Scroll down past the 'Submit Reply' & 'Preview Post' buttons, see the other quotes.

Highlight the sentence or line you want from a previous posting, and copy it into the quote/reply/message pane that you've opened up.

Highlight the line again, in the quote/reply/message pane, and click the "Quote" radio button in the tools at the top of the quote window (cartoon script balloon, next to #).

Then you'll see it in code, "quoted".

Mouse-over the tools at the top of the message pane, their explanations pop up when you park the arrow at one of them.

To honor "Quotee", add the equal sign and name after (=curious_guy), no spaces between . Highlight and bold the name after wrapping with quotes.

Working between separate windows, I copied quotes with links to the author's post (little arrow after name, see 5 examples in my posting), but that is too busy, and not neccessary because the bulletin posting list is there anyway.

Click 'Preview Post' to see what you have done before 'Submiting Reply'.

BTW; I did think about "pretending" I didn't write that line. But I think I have a work-around. It'll be a surprise.

Thanks for the reply.

[StefanIsMe (imported)]

Welll.... the boy who said "we never saw him again" was a student in that particular school; nothing to say he does'nt appear at some other school